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Watching the Night Sky... by ~narutokunobessed:iconnarutokunobessed:



In the moonlight beaches open,
While the waves splash and swing,
Care not whether the gloomy sky
Remember promises of Friends!
Sand and the sadness, the loneliness withers
Hides you from separation-
Let it be known and reminded,
On the shores by-and-by!

Will it be ask about the person
if you may see him again?
Will you wonder, will you question,
Count the run of weary hours?
Will you let the silence of this,
Embrace sadness and dread?
O, yea little faith! There is better thought
Inside of yourself.

On the sandy shores of the beach
Do you find that you’re alone;
He abandon  you forever.
Or do you feel he is close,
Since you are connected in spirit.
Time is an essence you see,
Or you will never know again
While you watch the waves flow.

Since you are living and alive,
you will sling those away.
There are many worlds, but they all share the same sky.
One sky, one destiny.
Sweep the thought and fly away!
Let all of our wonders go, white and blue!
Distance hearts will rejoin as one
May find the light within.
I am sure am broken; what matter?
I’ll find you my friend!
©2008-2009 ~narutokunobessed
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Author's Comments

The title is truely suppose to be Watching the Night Sky on the Beach. Anyway, this a paraphrase of In the Orchard. It was for my English project which I sort of hated.

The poem is suppose to be about a person whose just watching the beach at night and just thinking about whether to get his friend or stay to watch a beautiful moment.

Edit: for some reason, this really talks about kairi. When I wrote this poem, I haven't played kingdom hearts.

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Very sweet (: Many of the parts felt dramatic, but in a good way. Nothing disturbing in the flow or so, it kept on nice

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Thank you. :)

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Good flow of words, it's very encouraging with the use of words that catch the reader's attention, like: moonlight beaches open.

Nice poem. :)

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Thanks.

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Wow, your words put a very strong picture of everything in my head as I read this. Good work!

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